To be focused or to be versatile, this
is a question. Many a man says that versatility is the culprit that stifles the
chance to be great in a certain field. Why cannot we, however, be great and
meantime be versatile? Leonardo da Vinci, probably the greatest artist and
scientist the history has ever seen, proves to us through his great
achievements both in arts and science that versatility does not contradict
greatness. I believe, being versatile, to a large extent, will dredge the canal
to the greatness.
To some degree, a wide range of knowledge
helps to deepen your understanding in a specific field. The aircraft, a
magnificent invention indeed, cannot be contrived if the inventors did not have
both biological keenness and engineering preciseness. Being a bird lover, in
this scenario, definitely did enormous contribution to the design of the
aircraft prototype. Therefore, it is often the case that some exposure to other
fields of knowledge will assist one in better understanding the subject in
question, if not further makes you great.
Besides, a versatile man can constantly
draw refreshment from other meaningful activities, which at least distinguishes
him from the mediocre who either wastes time in a lifeless subject or squanders
time in doing nothing at all. For example, I often get bored when I read books
for a long time; and I usually take up my flute and play a sweet tune or two. Then
I would feel considerably refreshed physically and spiritually. When I take up
my deserted book again, I find every sentence radiates wisdom and philosophy. Obviously
versatility provides one with a way to make the most of the time and therefore
prepares one for greatness.
Versatility and greatness, as far as I am
concerned, does not contradict; man can be great as well as being versatile as
long as he aspires. Versatile lends man a keen understanding and saves man time
that might be wasted in useless persistence. It is safe to say that to be
versatile, you are a step nearer to being great!
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1逻辑清楚,2用词准确多样3 概括和细节搭配4,句型多样5 修辞得当。
你各方面都做得不错,尤其修辞,但是有十几个地方小错,比如最后一段,那个contradict是个及物动词,应该是contradict each other.stifle the chance不如hurt the chance,等等。另外英语essay的最高境界是音韵节奏美,你的第一段做得很好,后面几段就差很多
1逻辑清楚,2用词准确多样3 概括和细节搭配4,句型多?
no offense
no offense
一看LZ就知道是下了很多功夫的,lexical resources很丰富,但是有的地方用的有点过了,有点desperate的感觉。
我觉得你不需要再提高你的用词和搭配了。争取加强下自己的argument,substance > Rhetorics,这样的话就比较完美了。